What's this need?

[WAHumor]

Here's the sales letter for a new product:

http://www.wicked-good-offers.com/promo ... /index.php

What does it need? I've stared at it too much to tell.

[Bensettle]

My first reaction is to your headline:

"How can you guarantee I can sell ANY product online? Sounds like more Internet hype and empty promises."

You may want to revise your headline so it not only sounds more believable but also differentiates you from the gazillion other sites promising more or less the same thing.

Haven't had a chance to read the rest of it yet...

Ben

[JosephRatliff]

Dan,

For this letter, I might suggest testing an "If / Then" style of headline...

"Promote anything online" requires that you break down the "hype-o-meter" of your prospect...and the If / Then headline does a good job there.

You may also consider an advertorial style of approach with this.

Ben started a thread, I forgot which one unfortunately, that contained one of those ads as a download.

Ben just might...put that link here too.

[Bensettle]

You mean this one...



Ben

[JosephRatliff]

See how awesome Ben is?

That's one reason I included him in my "teachers" list on this post:

http://www.selfstartersweeklytips.com/f ... hp?t=25323

[WAHumor]

I'm both happy and sad to say I'm working on this again.

Procrastination runs in my family. Mom waited an extra nine months before I was born, and I came home from the hospital two weeks before my second birthday.

Anyway, hit me high or hit me low, but either way, let me know!





Dan


P.S. I hear you all groaning, but it will get better...

[WAHumor]

[lisamariemary]

[terrapin719]

[angienewton]

[jsawvel]

I think the headline grabs you. It does seem like a "hypy" ClickBank product, but that doesn't mean the sales letter is bad.

Here is one thing I noticed. At the headline, you want to leave as much mystery as possible, so I wouldn't give them the "answer" too soon.

So, I would word this sentence differently:

"All You Need Is One Hour A Week Using These Quick, Easy Step-By-Step Lessons And You Can Stop Struggling And Start Selling With Top Proven Effective Methods That'll Spark More Results And More Profits!"

To me, this gives them the answer too early and lets the air out of the MYSTERY or the wonderful things your product is going to do. Let their imagination work a little more.