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by **Mohamed_Mnafeg** » Mon Apr 21, 2008 5:23 pm

Discover How A 27-Years Old Made $1,300,000 In One Month

Hi everyone
Please can you give me your opinion about this headline.

Thanks
Mohamed Mnafeg

by **Bonnie Lowe** » Mon Apr 21, 2008 6:15 pm

I think it might be better if it include the "what" after "27-year-old"... Bartender? Auto Mechanic? Librarian? Student? Blackjack player?

by **Mohamed_Mnafeg** » Mon Apr 21, 2008 6:37 pm

Hey Bonnie Lowe, really I must say : you are genius

Thanks
Mohamed Mnafeg

by **KansasDragon** » Tue Apr 22, 2008 1:43 pm

With "nothing down", "no investment", "online", "with other people's money"..

You might want to tag a little more descriptive in the headline to attract people interested in that kind of opportunity..

Because personally, I'm not interested in making $1,300,000 in 30 days in anything illegal..

by **Mohamed_Mnafeg** » Tue Apr 22, 2008 2:27 pm

what about this crazy headline?

Discover How A 27-Years Old Ex Wrestler Made $1,300,000 In One Month From Internet And Added Over 65,000 Subscribers To His List With A Simple Strategy You Can't Duplicate Right Now!

Thanks
Mohamed Mnafeg

by **skyjoe76** » Sun Jul 13, 2008 9:42 pm

Headline may be too long.

by **chastill** » Wed Jul 23, 2008 9:21 am

I think some documentation and credentials to support it would help.

by **robert adams** » Wed Jul 23, 2008 3:43 pm

by **chastill** » Wed Jul 23, 2008 5:38 pm

by **redspace** » Tue Jul 29, 2008 3:48 pm

by **alexc** » Thu Jul 31, 2008 6:01 pm

So the first thing is to use 27 Year Old, lose the hyphen and the s on the end of Years. You would like to come across as though you are intelligent, and that simple typo could cost you visitors who will think that you couldn't even type the headline without screwing it up. I'm bot trying to be rude or anything, so don't be offended, I'm just point that out.

Also, adding you career and a catch as to what the product is will help, but try to be concise.

"Discover How a 27 Year Old Wrestler Made $1.3 Million Dollars In One Month With This Easy To Use System"

Make sure you include the word Million in there as it will catch more attention.

by **Li Weng** » Tue Nov 11, 2008 9:27 pm

by **skyjoe76** » Thu Nov 20, 2008 3:36 am

The Headline is too cheesy. It may put off some who might suspect it's some scam.

by **mellymom3** » Fri Nov 21, 2008 1:15 pm

Yes, I agree. When I first read it, my first thought was "scam". Even if it is possible and has been done, you may want to rewrite it to make it sound like anyone has a chance and it is not a scam.

by **chastill** » Wed Dec 31, 2008 3:08 pm

You defintly have to back up what you say sooner...
or later...

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