by mellymom3 » Fri Mar 28, 2008 8:40 pm
Hi Network Mom,
I have a few questions after reading your sales page.
1. You said this is your own written book? Is not a sales page supposed to be written as if you wrote it yourself? This sounds more like a review than a promotion to try to get people to buy
2. It does not incite me to want to buy. It is kind of boring. I realize that the subject is a serious matter but still it was not a read that made me want to continue to the end honestly.
3. The pictures were nice, but there was not enough to be bulleted or pointed out, nothing to emphasize certiain key points you want to stress to get the reader to buy. Copywriters usually stress different colored fonts for certain things, as well as bolded bigger fonts.
4. There is really no call to action. Although there are positive points, testimonials and all, there is no real pull to make me take out my credit card.
I am just learning copywriting myself so these are just my 2 cents. I just don't know if you got your money's worth is all. Once again, the more opinions you can get the better. I do not know what exactly you had in mind for your sales letter. I could be way off base.