by edman » Sun Jan 29, 2006 11:12 pm
Attention Wealth Builders! Time is Money, So Get More Of It ... Here's How:
- You can try making the above stand out
- Try breaking the 60hrs a month down to days... The 60 hrs makes it look as a lot of time
- Try changing the headline color to a darker read... not brown.
- Also consider removing the shadow in the text at the bottom as it’s not so easy to read now
- Be consistent in the use of sub header color. Right now you have black and blue. The blue works better as it will help break up the page.
- To make it look like a letter, consider including
From the desk of Dave Navarro
Include date
Location even
Then begin the letter
- Align all your text to left.
- Increase the indent, to make the words per row shorter; it’s easier to read it that way.
- Use graphic, or background to highlight your bullet points, can’t see them now
- Move your earning disclaimer to the bottom of the page after the sales letter
“EARNINGS AND INCOME DISCLAIMER”
- At the bottom of the page, consider including info about all the benefits, in a nutshell. This will help lazy readers know what they will get quickly
- Do you think it’s wise to promote you forum straight away? I would suggest you block access so people don’t see what’s inside unless they register. Right now I see there’ not much traffic, and even though its just a test page, this may turn out to be negative before you get your forum going ass people will feel that not many are participating in your program … they won’t want to be the first.
- The yellow box stands out nicely, but there’s just too much going on in there, Initially I though it was just a guarantee, but there’s so much info about other things.
My 2 cents;)
Edward
