by Lynn Terry » Sat Apr 28, 2007 8:32 am
Great concept, Denise!
The first thing that I noticed is your headline at the top of the page. Without reading anything else, this is where the eye looks to figure out what a website (or page) is all about. You want to grab their attention, and lead them into your 'copy' - giving them a reason to read all of the text on your web page.
Since I dont yet know what a "swap" is, the "First Swap" headline is confusing. I would move that down (still bolded, and use it as a sub-headline or call-to-action) and put a more descriptive headline at the top of the page.
Perhaps something like this:
Sample Swapping Is Fun & Easy!
Grow Your Business By Joining In...
Not perfect, but something to work with perhaps. Your thoughts?