Hi All,
Have created a website focusing on an innovative physical product:
"Avani Revolv Anti Theft Tire Valve Cap" - http://www.avanigroup.com
The sales copy was created some time in May and have been under constant improvement ever since, and would like the opportunity to improve it even further to increase the conversion rate.
Would greatly appreciate views from the forumers in this copywriting thread. Many thanks!
Cheers
Surfiro
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Please review the sales copy of my website
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Please review the sales copy of my website
by Surfiro » Tue Sep 19, 2006 12:38 am
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by mattmarshall » Wed Sep 20, 2006 9:29 am
Not bad.
Seems like a decent product, but the copy is kind of dry.
Add some drama.
"The Blue Haired Skateboard Punk Chuckled As He Walked Up To My Lexus... But When He Left Empy-Handed... I Had The Last Laugh"
[DISCLAIMER: This is not a real headline, it's just something off the top of my head. It's an idea starter, not a word-for-word headline that you or anyone should use.]
Matt
Seems like a decent product, but the copy is kind of dry.
Add some drama.
"The Blue Haired Skateboard Punk Chuckled As He Walked Up To My Lexus... But When He Left Empy-Handed... I Had The Last Laugh"
[DISCLAIMER: This is not a real headline, it's just something off the top of my head. It's an idea starter, not a word-for-word headline that you or anyone should use.]
Matt
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