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How do you think to my first site? Please review and advise.

Postby MichaelFu » Sun Oct 19, 2008 5:26 am

Hi there,

I just finished my first opt-in page today.

Here is my site: http://www.EzinePool.com

I would like to ask for a critique of this site such as:

- How do you like the design of the page?
- Does it look okay in other browser?
- How does copywriting on this page? (I.E. Pre-headline, Main-headline,

bullets, call to action)
- What would make you want to join this list?
- Is there anything on this page that would keep you from joining my list?
- etc...

Thank you in advance for your kind advice :-)
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Postby Bensettle » Sun Oct 19, 2008 11:10 am

- What would make you want to join this list?
- Is there anything on this page that would keep you from joining my list?
- etc...


The incorrect English in spots is probably going to keep lots of people from joining your list. So the first thing you may want to do is get an English-speaking writer to fix some of the awkward sentences.

Check out eLance or maybe just ask a friend (the mistakes won't be hard to fix.)

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