Don't capitalize words that are not at the beginning of a sentence and are not proper nouns.
You use the word "just" a lot.
You have a lot of long sentences. Your words flow better when the sentences vary both in length and style.
Hope that helps.
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Criticize my article please.
by gk_awadhiya » Mon Jul 24, 2006 2:09 am
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by FreeContent » Tue Oct 17, 2006 5:57 pm
Just a couple of tips:
Don't capitalize words that are not at the beginning of a sentence and are not proper nouns.
You use the word "just" a lot.
You have a lot of long sentences. Your words flow better when the sentences vary both in length and style.
Hope that helps.
Don't capitalize words that are not at the beginning of a sentence and are not proper nouns.
You use the word "just" a lot.
You have a lot of long sentences. Your words flow better when the sentences vary both in length and style.
Hope that helps.
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Article Critique
by tltfaas » Fri Nov 03, 2006 7:28 pm
GK,
I don't mean to be discouraging but you need a professional editor to work on your article. You've got too many single lines that should be paragraphs, some of the language is stilted and capitalizations are wrong in some places. I think you need the article to be more substantial and have a catchier headline... there are so many articles about affiliate programs out there and yours won't stand out.
Sorry I couldn't be more encouraging.
Bonnie
I don't mean to be discouraging but you need a professional editor to work on your article. You've got too many single lines that should be paragraphs, some of the language is stilted and capitalizations are wrong in some places. I think you need the article to be more substantial and have a catchier headline... there are so many articles about affiliate programs out there and yours won't stand out.
Sorry I couldn't be more encouraging.
Bonnie
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