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How A 27-Years Old Made $1,300,000 in one month

Postby Mohamed_Mnafeg » Mon Apr 21, 2008 5:23 pm

Discover How A 27-Years Old Made $1,300,000 In One Month

Hi everyone
Please can you give me your opinion about this headline.



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Postby Bonnie Lowe » Mon Apr 21, 2008 6:15 pm

I think it might be better if it include the "what" after "27-year-old"... Bartender? Auto Mechanic? Librarian? Student? Blackjack player? 8)
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Postby Mohamed_Mnafeg » Mon Apr 21, 2008 6:37 pm

Hey Bonnie Lowe, really I must say : you are genius


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Postby KansasDragon » Tue Apr 22, 2008 1:43 pm

With "nothing down", "no investment", "online", "with other people's money"..

You might want to tag a little more descriptive in the headline to attract people interested in that kind of opportunity..

Because personally, I'm not interested in making $1,300,000 in 30 days in anything illegal..
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Postby Mohamed_Mnafeg » Tue Apr 22, 2008 2:27 pm

what about this crazy headline?

Discover How A 27-Years Old Ex Wrestler Made $1,300,000 In One Month From Internet And Added Over 65,000 Subscribers To His List With A Simple Strategy You Can't Duplicate Right Now!



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Postby skyjoe76 » Sun Jul 13, 2008 9:42 pm

Headline may be too long.
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Postby chastill » Wed Jul 23, 2008 9:21 am

I think some documentation and credentials to support it would help.
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Postby robert adams » Wed Jul 23, 2008 3:43 pm

I think it sounds like way too much hype regardless of how you say it.


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Postby chastill » Wed Jul 23, 2008 5:38 pm

$1.300,000 a month. Thats almost the national debt.
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Postby redspace » Tue Jul 29, 2008 3:48 pm

Ya that would make your conversion rate to the roof.
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Postby alexc » Thu Jul 31, 2008 6:01 pm

So the first thing is to use 27 Year Old, lose the hyphen and the s on the end of Years. You would like to come across as though you are intelligent, and that simple typo could cost you visitors who will think that you couldn't even type the headline without screwing it up. I'm bot trying to be rude or anything, so don't be offended, I'm just point that out.

Also, adding you career and a catch as to what the product is will help, but try to be concise.

"Discover How a 27 Year Old Wrestler Made $1.3 Million Dollars In One Month With This Easy To Use System"

Make sure you include the word Million in there as it will catch more attention.
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Postby Li Weng » Tue Nov 11, 2008 9:27 pm

alexc wrote:So the first thing is to use 27 Year Old, lose the hyphen and the s on the end of Years. You would like to come across as though you are intelligent, and that simple typo could cost you visitors who will think that you couldn't even type the headline without screwing it up. I'm bot trying to be rude or anything, so don't be offended, I'm just point that out.

Also, adding you career and a catch as to what the product is will help, but try to be concise.

"Discover How a 27 Year Old Wrestler Made $1.3 Million Dollars In One Month With This Easy To Use System"

Make sure you include the word Million in there as it will catch more attention.



It's a good headline, and should work well. The only I'd say is that $1.3 million in one month might trigger the bullshit detector in people.
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Postby skyjoe76 » Thu Nov 20, 2008 3:36 am

The Headline is too cheesy. It may put off some who might suspect it's some scam.
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Postby mellymom3 » Fri Nov 21, 2008 1:15 pm

Yes, I agree. When I first read it, my first thought was "scam". Even if it is possible and has been done, you may want to rewrite it to make it sound like anyone has a chance and it is not a scam.
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Postby chastill » Wed Dec 31, 2008 3:08 pm

You defintly have to back up what you say sooner...
or later...
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